Wednesday, 1 July 2015

Best Piece of Writing

This is a really good piece of writing because it has my goal in it and I wrote it according to my plan and I have spent a lot of time on it. My goal is similes and I put my best effort into it. I am so happy in myself because I put lots of details and that made me happy because I had it ready in time. So hope you like my story.

Hi everyone my name is Kate and I am as naughty as this apple beside me.
My name means free and lot of people think that I have the right name.
Last year I went to jail because I stole a $ hundred necklace. In jail I had heaps of friends
also when we got to be let free for a bit I would spend all my time hanging with my friends.
My friends names were: Gia,Lucia, Maliesi,Daina and Taryn. Well they finally let me out anyway by the way I was tired of walking round to room to room anyway, my legs would get as sour as broken leg. 10 years latter.
I decided to repeat my badness by stealing. First I made my plan next I thought well I could go to jail again. The next day.  
O.M.G [ oh my god]  I complete didn’t get court YAY YAY. Tonight I’m going to look on the news and see if my case is on the news. MWAHAHAHA! I was cooking dinner then the news came on, yay yay time to see how much trouble I have made. On News.Today there was a burglar around Rova street now we know that they did steal a $ 
necklace. We believe that it was Kate or Lucy. Ring!
Hello this is Kate well I went passed Rova street and I saw Lucy's car by 52 Rova street! Um OK do you happen to know her number plate on her car? Yes I do HD4A0U OK thanks for your information OK bye.Bep
Oh yea I'm getting away with this. Ring!
Hello  this is F.B.I government and I rang Lucy and she said she has no necklace and she doesn't know this person at all, oh well I didn't do it because I don't have a necklace OK can we come to your house and have a check that you ain't lying um ok Bep. OMG what do I do now? Mmm I know I can quickly speed along to Lisa's house! RMM RMM yes I'm there. knock knock 
who is it oh hi what are you doing here? Well I need you to look after this necklace WOW that is as shiny as gold I know so that why I came here. The police are coming to check if I have this at my house. So I need you to look after it OK OK  thanks. RMM RMM few just in time. Knock knock. Who is it F.B.I oh hello come on  in look if you need to. . . 
Thank-you for helping find the necklace but there is no evidence. OK I really need to speed to Lisa's house and get the necklace. EXCUSE ME!OH NO I just said it stupid stupid stupid she said That was totally wrong. Kate you are under arrest for stealing and lying to a police. Well that was stupider than pouring milk on my  new black carpet, hhhh what have I done?  The next day 
Kate you can be let out and can talk to your mother for a bit OK.Hi mum Hi Kate, everything went quiet for about 2 minutes. What in the world were thinking I don't know? You graduated high school and you are 16 what were you seriously thinking? Sorry Kate come back to your room. Why did I have to do this? One week latter.
Miss Kate you are let out. OK bye everyone! Oh my god I thought this would never happen. I am so happy like happier than a rich person. But I am a bit sad because I can't see my friends anymore so sad. But time for the candy store woah. We are there!
I got redliquorice,sherbet lollies,lego lollies,apple syrup taste and rainbow tres. Yum yum yum this going to be awesome, that was complete yum! Time for the pools, this going to be awesomer than winning something. 1 2 3 eeee  S.P.L.A.S.H
I am never going to do bad things again ever! I don’t know why I wanted to be bad!!

And that is the end of the Black Cat Bad Cat.


  1. Awesome Abbie! I loved it. It made me smile :) You have used very descriptive language and that makes your story interesting! I couldn't read some of the words because of the font but I soon found out what they were. I would love to read more of your blog! From Eliala

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    1. Thank you I'm shore I will have more pieces of my writing on my blog. Abbie